Where has Rangitoto gone? some Auckland fog poems

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It is so WILD in Auckland I can’t see anything but GREY so when I came across this email from a teacher at Ignatius Primary School I decided to post their fog poems.

Meanwhile I busy reading all your fabulous Autumn poems and it is going to be SO hard to pick some to post on Tuesday as they are all so wonderful.

Great job Year 3! I loved reading these.



Can’t see far into the trees

Smells damp and wet

Tastes like little drops of water

Dogs, cats and people look like ghosts.

By Hamish


Windy like a storm coming

Wet and sticky, misty clouds all around

Feels like water, cold and wet.

Looks like ghostly shadows

and misty clouds,

Tastes like salt

Things in the distance

Big and bad tiger

Dark and hard to see

Sloppy like a frog

Wobbly like unbalanced people

Can’t really catch it like a fly.

Looks like lots of clouds

Stops you from seeing,

dark and hard to see like a black cat.

By Niamh Year 3


FOG……. Blank, blurry,

can’t see anything

Quiet, still,

reminds me of Halloween,


and creepy otters.

By Alex Year 3


Wet and sticky

Like a big cloud around you,

It’s a shadow from a distance

You can’t see anything when it’s foggy.

You sometimes need to turn your lights on when you’re driving in the car.

By Orla H. Year 3


Everywhere clouds

Wet, misty, foggy shadows in the distance

Salty, quiet, cloudy, plain.

Soggy sweating people,

Mash-pea soup.

Smells a bit funny, ghosty, cold

Frost, hard to see

Grey, snow flaky,

Thick or thin

By Olivia Year 3


Thick and damp

No shadows anywhere

Making the street quiet

Tastes like dirty water

Misty everywhere

You can see nothing

Wet and cold

Making things invisible

By Chris Year 3


Poetry Box May tips and challenges – all the leaves are falling

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my long shadow in the soft beach light


This month I thought it would be fun to write Autumn poems. We all write Autumn poems but we all experience Autumn differently. We start to eat different things, wear different things and we start to do different things.

I don’t think there is any topic in the WORLD that is all USED up.

Let’s share something about autumn in a poem.


Surprise me!


We have just explored how poems can sound good (check April 1sT) so use your ears as you write.


You might pick one Autumn thing to explore.

You might explore lots of little Autumn things.

Do you have an Autumn story?

Have you seen something amazing in Autumn?

Or tasted?


HOT TIP Good detail will make your poem hook the reader.

Try three different endings. Which is your favourite?


P  l  A    y       w       t

i       h               how you set your poem out. Try different ways.

Sometimes words on the page just flow. Sometimes they make a picture. What do you like?



HOT HOT HOT TIP: START by collecting lots of words to do with Autumn things. (Tip: hunt for lots of Autumn nouns and verbs before you try hunting for adjectives)


SEND your poem to paulajoygreen@gmail.com

DEADLINE Friday May 27th

Include your name, age, year and name of school. You can include your teacher’s email if you like.

P l e a s e    p u t   ‘Autumn poem’ in the subject line of your email.

I will pick some favourites to post on the blog and have a book for at least one reader and maybe even a book for a class.

I will post on Tuesday May 31st.


My favourite poems that sound good from your April challenge

In April I posted tips and challenges on writing poems that sound good.

Thanks for sharing! I loved reading them and saying them out loud.

I really like the way these three poems use sound differently.


Trinity plays with different line lengths so her poem sounds so good.

Vesper has worked on the flow of words so her poem flows beautifully. I love the way the word ‘slicing’ jumps off the line. And the word ‘shines.’  This poem gave me shivers on my skin as I read it. It starts with sound and then builds a picture.

I love the way Daniel and Gemma, brother and sister, wrote a poem together about their grandfather. I think repetition really adds to the sound of the poem beautifully. It is like a little grandfather chant.

I am sending a book to Vesper. If you missed out this time I am posting a new challenge tomorrow (the first day of the month!).



The Forest 

The light shines through the leaves like blades,

slicing through the night air.

I lie in my tent,

I hear the wind howling through the leaves.

I see Vesper the evening star,

watching over the city, and me.


by Vesper W Ilam School (Rm 7, age 6)

Vesper told me that ‘Vesper’ is another name in Latin and Greek mythology for evening star and that it also a name for evening song for evening prayers. How wonderfll is that!


Who is he?

Who is Ganga?

He is tall

Someone to look up to

His hair fuzzes around his ears

And his face shows smile lines

He is kind

Kind of wonderful

Speaks beautiful big words

Like a walking, talking book

He is my Ganga


Who is My Grandad?

He is an armchair Olympian

An awesome team player

Who knows every team

A warrior of words

Crosswords quiver when he picks up his pen

Cruising through retirement

Cruising round the world

Leaving one foot on each tide of the Tasman

He is my Grandad


Who is he?

He is grandfather, father, uncle and husband

He is friend, neighbour and mentor

He is strength, courage and wisdom

He is who we need him to be

He is


By Gemma (10) and Daniel L (6) Adventure School, Porirua



Here goes

Dip the paintbrush in the blue

First stroke

Create the waterfall and river outline


New colour

Dip the paintbrush in the brown

Second stroke

Create the cliff and sky outline


Detail time

Get another shade of light blue

First blend

Blend the two different blues together


More detail

Get another shade of dirt brown

Second blend

Blend the two different browns together

Trinity Age 10, Year 6, Gladstone School

A fabulous, heart-warming ANZAC Day book for children: Gladys Goes to War

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Gladys Goes to War written by Glyn Harper, illustrations by Jenny Cooper, Puffin Books,  2016


Gladys was a real person who went to World War I because she didn’t want to sit at home knitting. She loved cars and driving so she ended up becoming an ambulance driver. Before the war, it was very unusual for girls and women to do the jobs of men.

ANZAC Day is a time to remember the people we have lost and to remember the high cost of war, especially when our planet is still a battleground in places.  To share stories.

There are so many stories that come out of war. This story shows the courage of a young woman who followed her husband and became an ambulance driver in dangerous situations. She survived the war but her brothers and husband didn’t.

At the end of the war, she became very ill and spent a year in bed. But after that long rest, she found the strength to do extraordinary things. She drove across Australia with a friend and fixed her car whenever it broke down. She learned to fly and was the first woman in NZ to get her licence. She looked after war veterans when she was old.

This is a heart warming story that makes you feel sad and glad.

Gladys was a pioneering woman who showed us that we can do anything. Even when we have to face terrible hurdles.

Jenny’s illustrations are so full of life that they make you feel like you are there. I especially love the people. Jenny made these people matter to me.

Congratulations Glyn and Jenny – you make a great team. This beautifully written book is a must read!

April is Sound – some challenges for you


This month I thought you could explore ways to make a poem sound good. I love reading my poems out loud and I always want them to sound good.

I think writing a poem is a bit like making music.

This month you can send me a poem that sounds good when you read it out loud. This doesn’t mean it is a poem about sound. It means you listen to every line as you write.


My sound tips:

Play with how many words on a line. That changes the sound of your poem.

Play with long words and short words.

Hide rhyme in your poem.

Use words that almost rhyme.

Use words that sound delicious in pairs or triplets.

Put the words in surprising orders.

Listen to the rhythm of your lines. How can you change it?

Will you have verses?

Make sound patterns of words in a poem.


SEND your poem to paulajoygreen@gmail.com

DEADLINE April 27th

Include your name, age, year and name of school. You can include your teacher’s email if you like.

PUT sound poem in the subject line of your email.

I will pick some favourites to post on the blog and have a book for at least one reader.

I will post on April 29th.


Happy poem days

from Paula x

Calling young poets: be part of Dylan Thomas’s Great Poem

Entries for the Dylan’s Great Poem competition open 28 April and you only need to write four lines to be in with a chance of winning

Welsh poet and playwright Dylan Thomas
Be like Dylan Thomas and strike a (poetic) pose. Photograph: Francis Reiss/Getty Images

If you’ve ever fancied yourself as a budding poet then listen up! Inspired by the Welsh poet Dylan Thomas, Literature Wales is about to open its competition to write Dylan’s Great Poem – a 100 line poem written entirely by young people from all over the world.

To enter, you need to write up to four lines of poetry in English or Welsh, based around the theme “hands”, a topic inspired by Dyan Thomas’s poem ‘The Hand That Signed the Paper.’ From all the entries, 100 of the best lines will be chosen, and put together to create the “Great Poem”. The final poem will be put together by Rufus Mufasa and Clare E Potter and will be performed live on International Dylan Day on 14 May.

Not only that, but for those of you living in Wales there’s an extra prize on offer, with Welsh entrants between the ages of 11 and 17 having the chance to be selected for a poetry writing masterclass.

Don’t think that this means you have to be Welsh to enter though! Anyone between the ages of 7 and 25 can enter, no matter where in the world you are from. Submissions open on 28 April at 9am and close on Thursday 5 May, so get scribbling!

Dylan Thomas was born in Swansea, Wales in 1914 and is widely regarded as one of the most important poet of the 20th century. His works include the play, Under Milk Wood, and numerous poems, such as Do not go gentle into that goodnight. International Dylan Day on 14 May celebrates his life and works.

To enter the Dylan’s Great Poem competition visit developingdylan100.com