TaraDada The winners of the sound-good challenge

Here are my three top picks for a poem that sounds good.

 

Sam has written a poem that sounds great. I love the way the ‘eek’ sounds run through the poem like the squeaking door. I also like the way the title says one thing (something scary!) and then the poem says another (something ordinary!). I like the way Sam has a few words on each line — it adds to the atmosphere of the poem. Awesome job Sam (BTW everyone Sam told me he is a boy). I look forward to seeing more poems by you. There must be something in the water at your school because Ohaupo School is sending in very cool poems. Sam will get a copy of Margaret Mahy’s The Word Witch thanks to HarperCollins NZ.

Spook in the Night

 

Eeeeek  eeeeek

is the sound

of our door

in the night

 

 

I am in bed

and the creak

gives me

a fright

 

 

Mum gets some oil

to fix

the loud

squeak

 

 

And now

I find

that I can

sleep

Sam S  aged 8, Year 4 Ohaupo School

 

Luke’s poem has lots of different sounds. It sounds great read aloud. There are some words that shine in the lines ( like ‘pop’ and ‘bright blur’). I love the fierce energy and then the way the ending catches you by surprise. It is a poem I want to read more than once. Magnificent job Luke. Luke will get a copy of Margaret Mahy’s The Word Witch thanks to HarperCollins NZ.

 

The Ferocious Giant

 

I look out the window

There are trees swaying side to side

Leaves flying towards the sky

Clouds pushing and shoving

Sudenly red eyes pop out and sharp black teeth from inisde a mouth

It opens and gets deadlier

There’s a bright blur behind the ferocious giant

It gets smaller and smaller

Woosh!

Rain drops like a busted water balloon!

Luke W aged 10, Year 6 Manurewa East Primary

 

Madeleine shows how you can play with the number of words on line, use rhyme here and there, and use a word or two that shines (swooped). Her poem sounds good! I loved ‘silent wings’ and then in the next line ‘swooped.’

I will pop a copy of my poems Macaroni Moon in the mail for you (there are only a few copies left as it is out of print!). Great job Madeleine!

 

The Haunted House

 

As I walked into the Haunted House,

I heard a creeping on the floor,

I turned around …

and a scary Ghost flew straight through the door.

 

I was shaking,

not knowing what to do,

then on silent wings

a Morepork swooped down and whispered “BOO!”

 

I slowly backed away.

‘This was not my favourite day,’

I say!

 

Madeleine P aged 12, Year 8 Campion College Gisborne

 

 

 

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