The sound good poems plus two more

I have decided to repost the poems I picked for the sound good challenge and I have added a couple more. I will have a new competition for you on Monday (I can’t wait to see what you do for this!) but meanwhile you can try out my mini challenges this week or commenting on the posts.

 

Sam has written a poem that sounds great. I love the way the ‘eek’ sounds run through the poem like the squeaking door. I also like the way the title says one thing (something scary!) and then the poem says another (something ordinary!). I like the way Sam has a few words on each line — it adds to the atmosphere of the poem. Awesome job Sam (BTW everyone Sam told me he is a boy). I look forward to seeing more poems by you. There must be something in the water at your school because Ohaupo School is sending in very cool poems. Sam will get a copy of Margaret Mahy’s The Word Witch thanks to HarperCollins NZ.

Spook in the Night

 

Eeeeek  eeeeek

is the sound

of our door

in the night

 

 

I am in bed

and the creak

gives me

a fright

 

 

Mum gets some oil

to fix

the loud

squeak

 

 

And now

I find

that I can

sleep

Sam S  aged 8, Year 4 Ohaupo School

 

Luke’s poem has lots of different sounds. It sounds great read aloud. There are some words that shine in the lines ( like ‘pop’ and ‘bright blur’). I love the fierce energy and then the way the ending catches you by surprise. It is a poem I want to read more than once. Magnificent job Luke. Luke will get a copy of Margaret Mahy’s The Word Witch thanks to HarperCollins NZ.

 

The Ferocious Giant

 

I look out the window

There are trees swaying side to side

Leaves flying towards the sky

Clouds pushing and shoving

Sudenly red eyes pop out and sharp black teeth from inisde a mouth

It opens and gets deadlier

There’s a bright blur behind the ferocious giant

It gets smaller and smaller

Woosh!

Rain drops like a busted water balloon!

Luke W aged 10, Year 6 Manurewa East Primary

 

Madeleine shows how you can play with the number of words on line, use rhyme here and there, and use a word or two that shines (swooped). Her poem sounds good! I loved ‘silent wings’ and then in the next line ‘swooped.’

I will pop a copy of my poems Macaroni Moon in the mail for you (there are only a few copies left as it is out of print!). Great job Madeleine!

 

The Haunted House

 

As I walked into the Haunted House,

I heard a creeping on the floor,

I turned around …

and a scary Ghost flew straight through the door.

 

I was shaking,

not knowing what to do,

then on silent wings

a Morepork swooped down and whispered “BOO!”

 

I slowly backed away.

‘This was not my favourite day,’

I say!

 

Madeleine P aged 12, Year 8 Campion College Gisborne

 

I also liked the entries from Roydvale School.  I have picked a couple but they all sounded great. The words zing and zip themselves and then you have the sounds the poet has heard by the swimming pool. I discovered lots of great sounds in these poems. I love the way bubbly and hurry are on the same line in Yvonne’s poem and I love the way clonk and click are side by side.  These poems are sound treasure troves … much to discover.  Great job Room 11!

On the way

laughing happy

All of the children

rustling leaves

in the wind

 

At the pool

running quickly

to get changed

refreshing water

plip, plop the rings go in

I splash KA-BOOM

into the water

 

Time to get out

I wrap my towel

I am freezing like I am

in the Artic!

 

Jayden aged about 7

 

On the way

I am happy

I am bubbly and hurry

 

At the pool

we are running

I get changed and jump

 

Time to get out

sad, frozen, wet patches

hair a mess

 

By Yvonne aged about 7

 

 

 

Excited.  I’m walking, going to the pool

Clonk, click goes the children’s shoes

When the teacher opens the gate

I jump for joy!

 

At the pool

Splashing! I am having a great time

Splishing and splashing all around the pool

Swimming very fast!

 

Time to get out

Dripping on the hard ground

The sun shining down on me

Changed, running back to class!

 

By Ben  aged about 7

 

 

 

Leave a Reply

Fill in your details below or click an icon to log in:

WordPress.com Logo

You are commenting using your WordPress.com account. Log Out /  Change )

Google photo

You are commenting using your Google account. Log Out /  Change )

Twitter picture

You are commenting using your Twitter account. Log Out /  Change )

Facebook photo

You are commenting using your Facebook account. Log Out /  Change )

Connecting to %s