My favourite poems that sound GOOD

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Congratulations! You sent in a terrific lot of poems that sound good. My ears were buzzing with delight as I read them all. If I didn’t pick your poem to post this time, try the March challenges.

 

Here are some of my favourites:

 

Ewen has played around with a number of the sound challenges. She has tried rhymes that almost rhyme, two words on a line with tricky rhyme, made-up words and a catchy, repeating line like Margaret Mahy’s in The Lion in the Meadow. I loved the energy of these poems Ewen so I am sending you a book prize (another one of my favourite picture books, Donkeys (published by Gecko Press) as it has words and illustrations that sing.

 

Stones

Jagged, round

from roads in town.

 

Precious or plain

never the same.

 

 

Sky

Far sky

proud sky

dark sky

cloudy sky

 

sinking sky

hail sky

pink sky

pale sky

 

rain sky

light sky

plain sky

bright sky

 

doom sky

late sky

noon sky

fate sky.

 

 

Listen to The World For a Minute or Two

Listen to the blinds chimeaclatter

listen to the footsteps stompastamp

listen to the leaves swingarustle

listen to the birds chirpatweet.

 

Listen to the cars speedapass

listen to the wind whooshagrowl

listen to the airplanes whirafly

listen to the world for a minute or two.

 

 

The King of The World (A Margaret Mahy challenge)

The huge, trumpeting, wild elephants

storm across the land.

 

The huge, trumpeting, wild elephants

want to join the band.

 

The huge, trumpeting, wild elephants

make footprints in the sand.

 

The huge, trumpeting, wild elephants

don’t want to be banned.

 

 

Ewen W aged 11, Year 7, Cobham Intermediate School, Christchurch

 

 

I was over the moon to see a class had written a poem together. I wondered if they tried my challenge to shut their eyes for a few minutes and listen to sounds. I felt like I was right there in the classroom with my eyes shut. What a wonderful job, Room 2.

 

Duntroon School Sounds Before Playtime

A distant helicopter

Birds tweeting and chirping

Ducks communicating

Cicadas making their music, too

Bushes and leaves rustling

Voices

And light footsteps on the grass

Stones crunching

Wind whispering

Bees buzzing

The breeze lightly blowing the leaves

Our river rushing over rocks

The sounds of nature sometimes interrupted by vehicles passing

A car radio playing music, too

My stomach grumbling . . .

Playtime!

 

By Room 2 (aged 7 to 9)

(Teacher Natalie Aarts  told me Duntroon School is a rural school about 30km inland from Oamaru on State Highway 83. They are learning about the senses so doing a sound poem together was perfect, she said.)

 

 

Gemma and Daniel sent me in a bundle of sound poems that were (to borrow Gemma’s word) crackling with energy. They even wrote one together. I loved reading these. Gemma tried a poem with lots of onomatopoeia, Daniel made a very funny rhyme-y poem about a cat. I especially loved the rhyme in this poem, Daniel. Gemma’s lake poem was a symphony of sounds. I am going to send Daniel and Gemma a book to share as I loved their poems. I am sending them another favourite picture book that sings — with good words and cool pictures Bravo (also published by Gecko Press).

 

Early in the morning

Yawn, yawn crack

thump

 

creak, click

 

crackle, crackle

 

tinkle, tinkle

 

snap crackle pop

 

crunch, crunch, crunch

 

huoff erc, huoff erc, huoff erc

 

Vroom, vroom

 

 

Into the Lake

No ordinary jump

Extraordinary bump

 

leap

deep

swim

 

flew

 

bellyflop

mighty plop

 

Phew!

By Gemma, Adventure School, 8 (Happy Birthday!), Year 4

 

 

My Cat Flubber

My cat Flubber

Is made of blubber

She wobbles like rubber

But I don’t care

I love her.

 

Rhyme Time

I try my pie for morning kai

 

I pack a tic-tac for my snack

 

I glue blue goo to my shoe

 

I could fill my quill but it will spill.

 

By Daniel, Adventure School, 8, Year 4

 

 

 

I was delighted to get a whole bunch of poems from Ohaupo Primary School, Room 5, Year 3-4. Age 7-8. Usually I only pick a few from a class, but the poems all SOUND so good I have posted them all. What scrumptious words on each line. I can tell you used your EARs and went hunting for words that sound good together. These poems are such a treat I am going to send you a copy of my book Flamingo Bendalingo (it is full of animal poems!). Congratulations!

 

Tamsen T, year 4

Dragons
Razor sharp teeth
Smooth wings with claw like hands
at the end,
Red scaley skin rolling across its dragony body.

 

Jamie G, year 3
Crocodiles
Crocodiles are green with white sharp teeth
one long tail and little lumps on it with wide green eyes

 

Jonty K, year 4

Cheetah
Dark cheetah running as fast as lightning
With sharp jaws and teeth
Whiskery and roaring and with lots of spots.

 

Cayden M, year 4

Bull
A big rampaging angry bull
With sharp pointy horns
Charges at bright red fences
Ripping up the dry brown grass.

 

Hazel T, year 3

Lion
Big shaggy mane filled with meat
Lying down in hot blazing suns.
Getting up crossing big long grass
Stalking a big brown deer
Creeping low, grabs a leg, bites with razor sharp teeth
And kills straight away.

 

Elephants
Big brown soft eyes.
Ears thrashing against the wind.
Small and big grey shapes in the distance,
Slowly plonking along.
The elephant lifts up her trunk
Brrrrrr, the trumpeting sound fills the air,
As they charge towards the water hole.
Splash! They are running in the water,
The little one stumbles,
The mother nudges it back up again.
Then they swarm around me like bees.
Silently they vanish over the horizon
Holly D, year 4

Giraffes
Long stretchy legs, one swaying tail
A flagpole neck
A soaking blue tongue and stomping hooves.
Brown splodges from head to toe.

 

Kouper K, year 3

Koala
Blueberry eyes, fluffy feet
White snow fur and a tammy grey nose

 

Lion
A big fiery Lion
Snarled around the lake
Mud paws leaping on fish
Clawing the grass out of their homes
Ripping trash!

.

Cullen D, year 4

Duck
The amazing duck
The super little greeny brown duck
Was shaking its butt from side to side
As it waddled beside the pond
quacking loudly at the other ducks
Swimming.

 

Ally S, year 3

Cats
Lots of different types and colours
Tabby grey black and white, Siamese
blue sky, green grass and hazelnut brown eyes.
Long bushy, flicky, soft tail and sharp white shiny pointy teeth
That help kill mice and rats.
They can hide in bushes and climb trees
and jump in overgrown hedges.
They hiss, spit, scratch and to calm down they purr

 

Brady M, year 3

Leopards
Leopards have fluffy bushy tails with white sharp teeth
and with chocolate sharp claws,
with black dots and circular ears and purple diamond eyes
a sparkling yellow cat

 

Caitlyn T,year 3

Camels
Little tiny ears eating grass and drinking water in the hot sunny desert
People riding the camels looking for food to eat, to live, to survive

 

 

Elliw J, year 4

Puppy
Small ears, bluish eyes, brown skin, tiny teeth
small long puppy
tail running around
with the puppy in my hands
barking small noise

 
Shannon N, year 4

Cats
Clawing claws, sharp white teeth
Tabby fur, small ears, brown eyes

 

Jack H, year 4

Squirrels
The big bushy tail squirrel, has little beady eyes
soft ginger fur and sharp shiny fangs
A shiny black nose

 

Kaylee K year 3

Owl
There is a dark chocolaty owl sitting in the brown branches
With creepy tawny eyes.
Bright, yellow stars are flickering in the black sky
With a shimmering white moon.

 

Hawk
A beautiful white hawk is gliding through the blue shimmering morning sky,
with his wings open wide.

 

Maeghan T year 3

Bunnies
Long fluffy ears.
Round fluffy tail,
scratchy furry feet, silky soft body,
Breezy high, bouncy jumps.

 

Tigers
Bright orange and black like a big bumble bee.
Huge sharp teeth, clawing sharp feet.
Long swishing tail.

 

Squirrel
Long bushy tail.
White sharp teeth, almost as brown as chocolate.
Brown fluffy ears, eating a heap of nuts in Winter,
Gathering a lot of nuts in Spring.

 

Elephants
Big swishing ears.
Short swaying tails.
Grey round feet.
Grey huge body.

 

Tralee J Year 3

Pony
There in the green grass lies a pony.
Fluffy and furred, sliver moonshine eyes,
Big brown marks down its fur.
A chocolate mane and a cocoa tail.

 

Fox
There is an arctic fox.
White clouded furry arctic fox.
Blackberry eyes.

 

 

 

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