Here is Post 2 with some great EYE poems. Everyone used their EYES and everyone went hunting for EYE zinging words. I need to stock up on book prizes so just a handful to give away today.
Some students from Golden Sands School at Papamoa sent in poems that had EYE popping detail. The juicy words made the subjects of their poems come alive. I loved them all but I have picked some to post. Great job—they were all fabulous poems.
I am sending Cole a copy of Creepy Crawlies (amazing animal facts and puzzles to match his cool bat poem) and thanks to the lovely author Melanie Koster I am sending Olivia a copy of Melanie’s book, The Reluctant Little Flower Girl (this has gorgeous illustrations by Jenny Cooper and is about feisty flower girl!).
It’s marble like eyes
watch intently
over the land.
Its striped feathers
rustle as
its wings spread.
By Joshua, aged 7 years.
Wings spread out like a speck of a tree
Slimy skin slides across the stone brick wall
Eyes of the bat are a fluro red colour
He is looking at you …
The Bat.
By Cole, aged 8
The Mystery Animal
The razor sharp teeth are as white as the bright
glistening moon shining on the water.
By Joe, aged 8
The turquoise scales are like shooting stars;
The shimmer of the surfaces where they look like cars.
Their diverse bodies like slimey gunge,
All cold and wet like a slippery sponge.
As the sun goes down don’t make a peep,
As the aquatic creatures are sleeping
down deep
deep
deep
Aria, aged 10.
White Kiwi
Feathers as white as the glowing moon on the night sky
Shuffling along the track moving the crisp leaves as it goes
Night passes over the land as it peeps out
By Olivia, aged 8, Year 4
Tiger
With its strong body the tiger prowls through the
green jungle like the sly hunter it is.
It pounces off a tree like a monkey
and lands on its four feet.
Its fiery eyes stare at me with confidence as
if it was going to jump on me like a big, crazy dog
It opens its ferocious mouth
and roars like the king
it wants to be.
It’s terrific tail swishes around in the
wondrous wind like a million seagulls fighting
over one tiny piece of bread.
Maya, aged 9
The old
wrinkled
grey elephant
with feet as massive as river rocks
and ears flapping like a bird
reluctantly plods
through the grass
Phoebe, aged 10.
Mist swirled
twinkling fingers of pale sunlight
like the silent echo of birdsong
lanced through silky white fur
like soft milky moonshine.
Madi, aged 9
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Damian has found great detail to make a picture of a tree shine on the page.
My Tree
My favourite tree so broad and bold
surrounded by leaves
it has scattered when old,
the bark so rough
and its wood
so tough,
its long branches
when blown around
swing and dance,
its roots so deep
covered by dirt,
keeping it up so tall and steep
Damian, 11 years old, Bream Bay College, Whangarei
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Ellie has used rhyme and short lines to make a poem that has terrific rhythm and EYES at the centre. Great job Ellie!
What Eyes Show
Eyes know
Where minds go
Stories old
Stories told
Green and blue
Hazel too
Flecks are poised, like birds in flight
they flit between the dark and light
Angry glaring
Lonely staring
Slyly peeking
True love seeking
Eyes show
Where minds go
Dreams met
Secrets kept
By Ellie, age 12, Year 8, Prebbleton School, Christchurch
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Students at Glen Eden Primary School also sent in some terrific poems. I have picked a few to post.They have used some ELECTRIC similes to make their poems zing and pop.
Great White Shark
Great White Sharks are fast like the wind
And Superman
Swimming fast and strong
Like the Hulk
Scary and horrifying
Sharp teeth like a knife
By James K (Year 4)
Diamond Crazy Green Fish
Green like grass
Crazy like me
Diamondy like a crystal
Shiny like the sun
Spotty like a jacket
Crazy fish
By Ferila (Year 4)
Spooky Fish
Wobbly like a snake
Big like an elephant
Sharp like a torpedo
Strong like superman
Fast like a car
Spooky like a ghost
By Jerome (Year 4)
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Room 8 at Ohaupo School sent in a bunch of cool EYE poems. They looked a bit like eyes on the page and had eyes as their subjects. I like the way the young poets went hunting for eye words and found words that surprised me!
I loved reading them all but here are a couple of my favourites (I love the word ‘cucumber’ in a poem so I am sending Sophie a copy of one my favourite Gecko Press picture books, Donkeys):
Eyes
Beauty
Shimmering, beaming
Twinkling, gleaming, beady eyes
Golden, inky, sparkling, sunless
Pitch black, rayless, dusky
Faint, murky
Sooty
By Ashtyn, Year 6, aged 10
Eyes
Green alien
Spying, sneaking, twitching
Emerald jelly
Gooey gumballs
Sophie, Year 6, aged 1 0
Eyes
Coffee brown
Winking, flashing, observing
Coco chocolate
Crackling walnuts
By: Aimee O’Connor
Year: 7 Ages: 11
Eyes
Dark
Chilling, bloodcurdling
Flashing, petrifying, alarming
Blind, shinnying, sleeping, steering
Unlocked, unbolted, unfastened
Magnificent, dawning
By: Elizabeth, age 11, Year: 7
Blue eyes
Sapphire, ocean blue
Shinning, blinking, concentrating
Navy, icy blue, emerald, light
Olive, cucumber, forest green
Pickle green
Green eyes
Sophie, Year 6, age10