Here is Post 2 with some great EYE poems. Everyone used their EYES and everyone went hunting for EYE zinging words. I need to stock up on book prizes so just a handful to give away today.
Some students from Golden Sands School at Papamoa sent in poems that had EYE popping detail. The juicy words made the subjects of their poems come alive. I loved them all but I have picked some to post. Great job—they were all fabulous poems.
I am sending Cole a copy of Creepy Crawlies (amazing animal facts and puzzles to match his cool bat poem) and thanks to the lovely author Melanie Koster I am sending Olivia a copy of Melanie’s book, The Reluctant Little Flower Girl (this has gorgeous illustrations by Jenny Cooper and is about feisty flower girl!).
It’s marble like eyes
over the land.
Its striped feathers
its wings spread.
By Joshua, aged 7 years.
Wings spread out like a speck of a tree
Slimy skin slides across the stone brick wall
Eyes of the bat are a fluro red colour
He is looking at you …
By Cole, aged 8
The Mystery Animal
The razor sharp teeth are as white as the bright
glistening moon shining on the water.
By Joe, aged 8
The turquoise scales are like shooting stars;
The shimmer of the surfaces where they look like cars.
Their diverse bodies like slimey gunge,
All cold and wet like a slippery sponge.
As the sun goes down don’t make a peep,
As the aquatic creatures are sleeping
Aria, aged 10.
Feathers as white as the glowing moon on the night sky
Shuffling along the track moving the crisp leaves as it goes
Night passes over the land as it peeps out
By Olivia, aged 8, Year 4
With its strong body the tiger prowls through the
green jungle like the sly hunter it is.
It pounces off a tree like a monkey
and lands on its four feet.
Its fiery eyes stare at me with confidence as
if it was going to jump on me like a big, crazy dog
It opens its ferocious mouth
and roars like the king
it wants to be.
It’s terrific tail swishes around in the
wondrous wind like a million seagulls fighting
over one tiny piece of bread.
Maya, aged 9
with feet as massive as river rocks
and ears flapping like a bird
through the grass
Phoebe, aged 10.
twinkling fingers of pale sunlight
like the silent echo of birdsong
lanced through silky white fur
like soft milky moonshine.
Madi, aged 9
Damian has found great detail to make a picture of a tree shine on the page.
My favourite tree so broad and bold
surrounded by leaves
it has scattered when old,
the bark so rough
and its wood
its long branches
when blown around
swing and dance,
its roots so deep
covered by dirt,
keeping it up so tall and steep
Damian, 11 years old, Bream Bay College, Whangarei
Ellie has used rhyme and short lines to make a poem that has terrific rhythm and EYES at the centre. Great job Ellie!
What Eyes Show
Where minds go
Green and blue
Flecks are poised, like birds in flight
they flit between the dark and light
True love seeking
Where minds go
By Ellie, age 12, Year 8, Prebbleton School, Christchurch
Students at Glen Eden Primary School also sent in some terrific poems. I have picked a few to post.They have used some ELECTRIC similes to make their poems zing and pop.
Great White Shark
Great White Sharks are fast like the wind
Swimming fast and strong
Like the Hulk
Scary and horrifying
Sharp teeth like a knife
By James K (Year 4)
Diamond Crazy Green Fish
Green like grass
Crazy like me
Diamondy like a crystal
Shiny like the sun
Spotty like a jacket
By Ferila (Year 4)
Wobbly like a snake
Big like an elephant
Sharp like a torpedo
Strong like superman
Fast like a car
Spooky like a ghost
By Jerome (Year 4)
Room 8 at Ohaupo School sent in a bunch of cool EYE poems. They looked a bit like eyes on the page and had eyes as their subjects. I like the way the young poets went hunting for eye words and found words that surprised me!
I loved reading them all but here are a couple of my favourites (I love the word ‘cucumber’ in a poem so I am sending Sophie a copy of one my favourite Gecko Press picture books, Donkeys):
Twinkling, gleaming, beady eyes
Golden, inky, sparkling, sunless
Pitch black, rayless, dusky
By Ashtyn, Year 6, aged 10
Spying, sneaking, twitching
Sophie, Year 6, aged 1 0
Winking, flashing, observing
By: Aimee O’Connor
Year: 7 Ages: 11
Flashing, petrifying, alarming
Blind, shinnying, sleeping, steering
Unlocked, unbolted, unfastened
By: Elizabeth, age 11, Year: 7
Sapphire, ocean blue
Shinning, blinking, concentrating
Navy, icy blue, emerald, light
Olive, cucumber, forest green
Sophie, Year 6, age10